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. | Id | Haijin | Stanzas | Season | Kigo | Link | Theme 1:
Unoccupied | Theme 2:
Seat-related | |
. | 1 | /vs | Patch of daffodils —
the old John Deere parked
by a collapsed barn. | Spring | Daffodils | To 6: Rural; Collapsing | Tractor & Barn | Tractor seat | |
. | 2 | /vs | Empty rocking chair —
the cat naps undisturbed. | No Season | n/a | To 1: Parked | Chair | Rocking chair | |
. | 3 | /vs | Swing set —
a vacant seat sways
back and forth. | No Season | n/a | To 2: Rocking / Swaying | Seat | Swing's seat | |
. | 4 | /vs | The kite's tail
hangs from a branch —
spring drizzle. | Spring | Spring drizzle | To 3: Hanging | No kite flying | Tail | |
. | 5 | /vs | She rushes to the back —
one "occupied" light is off. | No Season | n/a | To 4: Tail (Kite / Plane) | Airplane washroom | Facilities | |
. | 6 | /vs | The backhouse door
lies on the ground — a squirrel
sits atop the roof. | No Season | n/a | To 5: Facilities; Open door | No human in the backhouse | Facilities | |
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. | Technical Notes: | | | | | | | | |
. | 5. In an airplane there are usually 2 to 4 washrooms at the back (tail) of the plane. When someone is using one of them, an "Occupied" light comes on so you can tell which one is available (the doors stay closed during flight whether someone is in it or not). The person in this verse really has to go and hopes there is a vacant washroom. Sure enough, one is available. A haiku reader might expect all the lights to be "on" and the feeling generated would be "desperation". I wanted the opposite feeling in this verse, "relief", as well as a reference to the "Unoccupied" theme. | | | | | | | | |
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