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. | Id | Haijin | Stanzas | Season | Kigo | Link | Link Type | Theme:
Weight |
. | 1 | /vs | Snowflakes
on a branch... it dips
a bit more. | Winter | Snowflakes | To 6: Snowflakes / Spray | 6-1: Scent | Light: Snowflakes |
. | 2 | /vs | Family dinner — garlic salt
on my stick of celery. | No Season | n/a | To 1: Particles on a "branch" | 1-2: Reflection | Light: Garlic salt |
. | 3 | /vs | Athletic club —
another gulp before
pressing thirty. | No Season | n/a | To 2: Consuming in presence of others | 2-3: Scent | Lifting: Barbells |
. | 4 | /vs | Siphoned gas —
on the way back the can
grows heavier. | No Season | n/a | To 3: Gulp / Siphon | 3-4: Reflection | Lifting: Can of gas |
. | 5 | /vs | Sudden blizzard... we taxi
back down the runway. | Winter | Blizzard | To 4: Stranded | 4-5: Scent | Heavy: Airplane |
. | 6 | /vs | Bowheads enter
an arctic bay... plumes spray
from blowholes. | Winter | Whales / Arctic | To 5: Runway / Bay | 5-6: Reflection | Heavy: Whale |
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. | Technical Notes: | | | | | | | |
. | The theme of "Weight" is represented by the two extremes of weight from Light (v. 1 & 2) to Heavy (v. 5 & 6), and with the lifting of weights in between (v. 3 & 4). | | | | | | | |
. | This rengay has a unique feature in that the links alternate between Echo/Reflection (1-2, 3-4, 5-6) and Scent (2-3, 4-5, 6-1). A reflection (or echo) link is where the one verse mirrors the objects and/or actions of the other verse but in a different setting. For example, the garlic salt sprinkled on the celery in verse 2 is a reflection of the snowflakes falling on the branch in verse 1. A Scent link is where the one verse matches the feeling that is present in the other verse. For example, the feeling in verse 4 of being stranded without gas is matched with the feeling of being stranded at an airport in verse 5. | | | | | | | |
. | 2. Consuming salt is known to retain water in one's body and therefore has the potential of increasing one's "weight". | | | | | | | |
. | 5. This winter storm is likely to cause the passengers to "wait" before finally departing for their desired destination. | | | | | | | |
. | 6. Bowheads are a species of whale that live their entire lives in the Arctic. | | | | | | | |
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