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. | Id | Haijin | Stanzas | Season | Kigo | Link | Theme 2:
Snow | Theme 1:
Where? | |
. | 1 | /ym | Shadow of a crow
on the snow in front of me —
where's the bird? | Winter | Snow | To 6: In front / Ahead | Snow | Where is the crow? | |
. | 2 | /vs | Fired from somewhere...
a snowball finds its mark. | Winter | Snowball | To 1: Through the air | Snowball | Where was it fired from? | |
. | 3 | /ym | Guarding
an empty doghouse,
a frosty man | Winter | Snowman | To 2: Snowball /
Snowman | Snowman | Where is the dog? | |
. | 4 | /vs | The house key
slips out of my hand —
fresh drift. | Winter | Drift | To 3: House | Drift | Where's the key? | |
. | 5 | /ym | A sudden sound, a sneeze —
the bushes move nearby. | No Season | n/a | To 4: Outward movement (key / sneeze) | On the bush (implied) | Where'd the sneeze come from? | |
. | 6 | /vs | Our toboggan
hits a bump... kids ahead
begin to scatter. | Winter | Toboggan | To 5: Suddenness | Snow-covered hill | Where will the toboggan go? | |
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. | Technical Notes: | | | | | | | | |
. | We started this rengay with the theme of "Where" but as it developed we found snow was the more prominent theme. Yvonne likes a rengay to tell a story so we also chose to write this rengay with a somewhat narrative tone. | | | | | | | | |
. | 5. The thought here is of the person who has just dropped their keys into the snow, paying all their attention to that and watching the hole that the keys had made in the snow. Then, from somewhere, there is a startling sneeze. Turning around, the person sees the bushes move and with that movement the snow on the branches falls to the ground. Since it has freshly snowed the snow falls along with the movement of the branches. Who sneezed? Was it a person? Was it perhaps an animal? | | | | | | | | |
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