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. | Id | Haijin | Stanzas | Season | Kigo | Link | Theme 1:
Barely Perceptable | Theme 2:
Senses |
. | 1 | /vs | The faint thump
of a distant basketball —
autumn evening. | Autumn | Autumn evening | To 6: Sports | Faint sound | Hearing |
. | 2 | /vs | Canola field horizon —
a glint of setting sun. | Autumn | Canola field | To 1: Round object | A bit of sun | Sight |
. | 3 | /vs | That area
in Grandma's back yard —
hint of mint. | Summer / Autumn | Mint | To 2: Field / Yard | Slight smell | Smell |
. | 4 | /vs | A new bill
in change... the slight feel
of "Twenty Dollars". | No Season | n/a | To 3: Mint / Money | Slight feel | Touch |
. | 5 | /vs | In line to buy corn —
I can almost taste it. | Autumn | Corn for sale | To 4: Money / Buy | Almost taste | Taste |
. | 6 | /vs | He knew before
the ball was even snapped —
long bomb. | Autumn | Football | To 5: Line / Scrimmage | Almost knowing for certain | Intuition |
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. | Technical Notes: | | | | | | | |
. | The second theme of senses came to me after writing the second verse. But there are five senses and yet there are 6 verses in rengay, thus the idea of using the 6th sense, intuition, as the last sense in the series. | | | | | | | |
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. | Money transcends the seasons so to speak. It is therefore appropriate that the verse where it is explicitly referenced has no seasonal reference. | | | | | | | |
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